Friday, March 14, 2014

Close Your Eyes


close your eyes
and listen
to the sound of
waves
crashing against
rocks,
feel the sun
on your skin,
the sand beneath
your feet

close your eyes
and taste
the saltiness
of the ocean,
feel the breeze
in your hair,
the cleansing
of water


close your eyes
and speak to me
softly,
let me hear
the music
of your voice,
let me breathe in
the scent
of you

close your eyes
and kiss me
as if it were
the first
and last time


My poem is posted for dVerse where we are challenged to write a poem using all the senses, except with our eyes closed. I tried to use imagery of sound, taste, touch, scent. This was a wonderful exercise. I took these pictures of the Atlantic Ocean last year. Close your eyes and imagine Summer Love! Have a great weekend!
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53 comments:

  1. it's a great magic poem before summer,thanks Loredana!.. happy weekend :)

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  2. mmm...love those kinda kisses...and i would love to be at the beach as well...i can close my eyes and hear the roar...smell and taste the salt...mm....one of my fav places...

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    1. happy sunday friend...
      hope all is well in your neck of the woods...

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  3. Love the pics and the words! I live on the coast of RI so enjoy the beautiful descriptions often. We are neighbors!

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  4. Yes, I can imagine the sand, summer love & crashing of the waves ~

    Lovely pictures as well ~

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  5. I like how you pull us along, and then reward us with the kiss at the end. Very nice!

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  6. swell! (pun intended :) ~

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  7. Now I wanna go to the beach!!! Loved it!

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  8. hmmm nice... i wanna go to the ocean.. the salt on skin combined with a kiss...perfection...

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  9. Ok that closing line was the best closing line I've read in a poem since I began blogging almost three years ago.

    "kiss me
    as if it were
    the first
    and last time"

    WOW...

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  10. All beautiful experiences with eyes closed! :)

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  11. you definitely paint a wonderful picture with all your senses, save sight. the pictures are lovely.

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  12. Am so partial to warm beaches and salt air. This piece in a word, "beautiful."

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  13. Being in a spot like that with nothing but nice sounds and kisses coming due, works for my zoo

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  14. wonderful sounds, smells, and the taste of kisses ...nice :)

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  15. Beautiful photos and wonderful words!

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  16. The ocean is a great place to meditate when you can find a quiet beach.

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  17. oh i would like to go to the beach
    lovely

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  18. Pretty photos and what a lovely poem! I can almost imagine myself there. It would be so nice to be on a beach right now! I love the beach :)

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  19. This is a really very sensory evocative poem, Loredana. You really have me smelling and tasting the saltiness of the ocean!!

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  20. very magical..and with a touch of the sensual.. the pictures were wonderful as I stare out at minus something temperatures... :)

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  21. How wonderfully sensuous and evocative. The sea is an appropriate background because it brings out the ephemeral nature of a kiss so well.

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  22. the moment eyes are closed all other senses become so alert...the lines are sensuous and meditative as well...so well written Loredana :)

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  23. mm..and my heart melted under the sun.. very romantic and beautiful, the last lines especially.

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  24. Beautiful, and I envisioned each thing you wrote about......one thing I can always summon with eyes closed is the sea!

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  25. Enticing... I love anything having to do with the beach.

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  26. I had missed this poem at dVerse so I am glad you have linked it at Poetry Pantry today. I like the romantic atmosphere and what you have shown us of the beautiful setting.

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  27. Lovely description of the beauty of the beach, can't wait to go.

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    Siga-me e pegue o meu selinho!!!

    Obrigada.

    Beijos Marie.

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  29. This makes me want to go to the beach..thanks for bringing me to this place of peace..

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  30. With you all the way on this one, Loredana - "...as if it were the first and the last time..."
    Indeed! With Best Wishes Scott

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  31. Very vivid poem bringing out all our senses...loved it!!

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  32. Very beautiful and absolutely lovable as you take our senses on one of the most pleasant journeys. Great poem. You have used Brian's prompt successfully.

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  33. Loredana, that really did work for me! Ifeel it! And in my current frame of mind, dear - that is really something...

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  34. I loved every line but as keith says above, the last line is amazing! well done Loredana.

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  35. I think this is just a gorgeous love poem.. and the last line... Aaah ,,, kiss like it was the first and last time... the ocean is such a carrier of love.

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  36. Beautiful imagery with your poem - yes, I can feel it, too. Summer days at the sea are wonderful.....xo Karen

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  37. Quite lovely! Great BIG smile on my face...thank you! Aloha

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  38. Wonderful, your poem and you pics!
    Have a great time and close your eyes sometimes for relax your soul!
    Elisabeth

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  39. Ah sì , bellissimo esercizio , bell'abbinamento fra foto e poesia. Abbraccio.

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  40. Lovely - how oft it is we see more sense more with our eyes closed.
    Anna :o]

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  41. Vous êtes d'un côté de l'Océan Atlantique et moi, je suis de l'autre côté. Ce superbe poème, très touchant, est un véritable trait-d'union d'amitié entre nous. Magie de l'océan et de l'inspiration, je l’écouterai dans la prochaine vague venant sur la plage de Carnac.
    Amitiés.

    Roger

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  42. I love the repitition here - close your eyes - it reinforces the synaesthesia!

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  43. I could close my eyes and imagine I'm right there laying in the sun.. that would be very nice!

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  44. I could just imagine I was there, even without the pictures. Excellent job utilizing all the senses except sight!

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  45. Thank you, everyone, for all your wonderful comments on this post! :)

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  46. A beautiful picture, a beautiful poem.

    Waving hello today from Pat's place!

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  47. A nice piece that I enjoyed reading. Well done. Some nice shots.

    Thank you. Love love, Andrew. Bye.

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  48. Those are great pictures, loved the poem too. I used to live in California and miss the ocean.

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  49. You got all the senses in there. In fact, perhaps a few extra. Ha
    I'm visiting from Pat's birthday rhyme.

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  50. Awesome pictures! I grew up around the ocean as a kid, and that's some of my best memories to this day. The ocean is so powerful and has a certain way of healing the soul as well. You have a great way of telling a story with your words and pictures! Have a great weekend:) Chris

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