Saturday, August 10, 2013

Sunset


ball of fire in the sky
red orange yellow
clouds, waves twirling
the horizon curving
light stream
reflections on water
i see me within

sunset

within me i see
water reflection
stream of light
curving the horizon
twirling waves, clouds
yellow orange red
sky, a fireball
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My poem is posted for the Sunday Mini-Challenge at the Imaginary Garden With Real Toads. Grace has challenged us to write a palindrome, a poem that reads the same forwards and backwards with a central focal point from where it begins to read backwards. My poem was inspired by a sunset photo I took tonight, and so "sunset" became the central focal point. The poem has different meanings to me when read forward and backwards. I so enjoy your interpretation of my poems. I'd love to hear what this means to you! Thank you as always for your insightful comments! xx
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60 comments:

  1. I love your description of your beautiful photo! It gives a slightly different feeling when read forward and backwards. Clever.

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  2. La mia insegnante di scrittura creativa ci ha fatto esercitare su questo modo di scrivere...una prova difficile ma tu l'hai superata alla grande con il tuo stile elegante e sensibile. Bello sapere un po' di inglese per poter apprezzare in lingua originale!Buona domenica,cara Loredana!

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    1. Grazie, cara Rita. Questo tipo di poesia era un po' difficile a scrivere in un modo che si potrebbe leggere avanti ed indietro! Una bella sfida molto creativa. Un abbraccio :)

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  3. Stupendo tramonto...complimenti, ciao e buona domenica! Cri : )

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  4. What a pretty sunset.. sunsets make good photo subjects!

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  5. cool...palindromes are not easy, and mirror poems deifficult as well to make sense of...yours came out well...and very nice imagery

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    1. Thanks, Brian. Yes, I did try to write it like a mirror image ... a reflection :)

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  6. You painted the sunset well with your beautiful words.

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  7. First, a stunning sunset picture ~

    Then, a lovely palindrome with nature as the theme in the first part, and the nice turn to the person ~ Very creative share ~

    Thanks for linking up with Real Toads and happy Sunday ~

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    1. Thank you for the challenge, Grace! I like your interpretation. Yes, I was going for a comparison/contrast with nature/humanity. :)

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  8. Very nicely done. You accomplished what is not easy to accomplish. I love your photo too!

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  9. Nice palindrome, Loredana and beautiful photo! I love how power from waves goes to light...nicely done :)

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    1. A nice observation! The power of waves and light, I like that :)

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  10. You have certainly caught the element of reflection in your description.

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  11. The first stanza I hear her moving outward to in and the opposite direction in the last. That creates a reflection extended, if that's the right word. I'm not sure about the inversion on the first line of the second stanza. Doesn't sound natural to my ear even with the form. Enjoyed.

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    1. Thank you for the constructive critique, LaTonya! I changed that line to: I see me within ... within me I see. It does make more sense now. I really appreciate your comment! :)

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  12. your subject is one we all can relate to

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  13. I love the two lights...we are joined like that. This was just beautiful.

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    1. Thank you, Talon. The joining of the two lights ... what an interesting take :)

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  14. love the beautiful bridge of sunset........

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  15. i like how it flows.. from outside to inside.

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    1. From outside to inside, yes ... that is what I was going for. :)

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  16. Your photograph and poem combine perfectly. And by the way, never thought about reading a poem backwards before.

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  17. Those would take more than my 10 minute to write posts lol great job indeed, forward and back at your shack

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    1. Oh the cat can go forward and back
      even jump and leap at your shack :)

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  18. beautiful...reads like a hymn. 'within me i see water reflection, stream of light.

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    1. a hymn, how interesting ... yes, it does have a spiritual quality to it :)

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  19. I love the horizon curving, in your photo and your poem......lovely imagery......very uplifting to read.

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    1. Thank you for noticing the horizon curving, Sherry. It is what inspired my poem :)

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  20. That is absolutely fantastic. It's my favorite that I've read in a long time. Not forced at all and I did not anticipate the end at all. I love the two different meanings of the same words. What comes in and what goes out What we think we become sort of

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  21. Ooo...your turning point is magical! I enjoyed this, Loredana!

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  22. Gorgeous picture and a gorgeous write!

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  23. Such a beautiful expression of the outer and inner world.

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  24. Th photo is marvellous, and the poem is both beautiful and clever. And yes, it is meaningful both ways, but differently. I have never been able to manage a successful palindrome! :(

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  25. This is so good, a perfect palindrome. I also love the photo, but the words are wonderful, especially the second stanza.
    K

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  26. I've only seen one ofher Palindrome poem while on Blogger (Brian - above, wrote one earlier this year) and I can't imagine how challenging they must be! You nailed it :)

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  27. I love the connection of making the image have a round sphere and talking about a ball of fire...very creative my friend.

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    1. Now we have proof that the world is round and not flat! Haha :) Thank you, Laurie!

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  28. I love it! It reflects perfectly the 'romance' of the natural world. A joy reading this one!

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    1. Oh you found it romantic, how sweet, thank you :)

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  29. Very nice! It really works well as a palindrome. It seems like it would be hard to write one of these poems!

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    1. Thanks, Tammy! It was hard at first, but once I decided on the focal word "sunset" it flowed more easily :)

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  30. I love your poetry, Loredana, and you always make the most wonderful images to go with them.
    I wish you a wonderful week ahead!

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    1. Thank you, Lisa! I took this photo with my smart phone and it's straight out of the camera. I have no idea why the horizon came out curved ... :)

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  31. SO gorgeous! Love your poetry! Thanks for sharing on WTS this week!

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    1. So glad you stopped by, Madge. Glad you enjoyed it all and thank you for hosting :)

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  32. Thank you for the warm welcome Loredana! Your photograph is quite heavenly. This challenge seems difficult to write but your poem flows beautifully.

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    1. Bonjour, Mademoiselle and welcome to my blog :) Thank you!

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  33. So beautiful, Loredana. You are an expert weaver of words. It is always a delight... Hugs, xoxo

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    1. Aww, thanks, Karen, what a sweet comment :)

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  34. Le soleil se couche
    L'eau brille de ses mille feus
    Il ne vont bientôt ne faire qu'un
    Dans la lumière orangée du soir qui tombe
    Dans le silence de la nuit qui se lève

    Amicalement Loredana

    Pascal

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    1. A beautiful poem in French, Pascal. I love it, thank you. :)

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